Writing Workshop

Hailey Jones

The writing workshop worked well with our class. Receiving feedback from your class mates and teacher helps you figure out where you need to improve on your writing techniques. When we read to each other our feedback, we said it in the nicest and most respectful way we could.

One thing we could work on is not saying “you” when sharing our feedback. We tended to say “you “a lot and I feel like that could upset the writer and make them feel as if we are attaching them. Maybe we could say “The Story needs to give more descriptive detail of Harper’s appearance.” Instead of “You need to give us more descriptive detail of Harper’s appearance.”

On another hand, I liked how everyone did not just tell Brooke what they thought needed a bit of work, but they gave her ideas on what she might be able to do to better her story. We worked together on helping to improve the story and make it a wonderful read!

Overall I thought this was an awesome exercise and helped a lot. If we continue to treat everyone with as much respect as we did the first go round, we will be alright. The positive critiquing will help us all reach our goals of becoming a better writer. 

Hailey Jones

Creative Writing II

Jan 15.2013

Emergency

I enjoyed reading the short story ‘Emergency’ the other day. The two main characters were two guys who worked in a hospital together, stole drugs, and used the drugs. There were two main characters, but you never heard what the narrators name was in the story. The narrator was referred to as “Fuck Head” a couple times throughout the story. The other main character is Georgie, an extreme drug addict. This story jumps around some, due to the characters being on drugs. I thought that was interesting because you as a reader can get a feel for what the characters were experiencing with their minds on drugs.  In the very first sentence of the story, the main character, says “I’d been working in the Emergency room for about three weeks, I guess.  I like the “I guess” because before you get into the story the author gives you a hint that the character doesn't have it together fully and uses drugs. I think that the name is ironic as well because the two main characters work in an Emergency room, but they are the ones that need to be put into an Emergency room! Overall, I thought this was a good read and enjoyed it!